It comes to you on the street.
Tralloping, galloping to its prey.
Those heads smash all they touch.
Pulverizing, demolishing – left with crumbles.
Be-cause
There’s a rea-
-son why
When we,
We look
In-
-side.
You will find-
A shi-
Mmer-
-Ing light.
They’re digging, they’re smashing,
They are sniffing.
Demolishing,pulverizing.
They are looking
For
The
Light.
cool structure π love the writing!
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Ah…thank you. π
Influenced by music.
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Yes, I understand this poem. Quite poignant
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I’m glad you do. Thank you.
Had to really give it a chance for it to be this way, a marriage between style, form and message.
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Yes, you did it well. I really liked your style. It spoke
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Thank you. Means a ton. π
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Really enjoyed the style for this deep piece. Some sentiments are best described this way – disjointed yet cohesive.
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I think that is a best description for what is. Thank you. βΊοΈ
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You are kindly welcome π
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beautifully written. the structure really emphasizes your point, and the flow is just mesmerizing. i feel that you already have a good grasp on so many of life’s most intricate concepts xx
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Thank you. Sometimes I feel I do, other times I don’t. βΊοΈ
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i don’t know, your writing always hits me hard in some form or another.
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Wow. I think that is best compliment any writer can get. I’m glad my writing connects that way with you. ππ
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Light and Dark.
Really loved it π
The contrast
I actually kinda wanted to know.. why the structure? Just like that?
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Haha. At some points it was supposed be jarring as way of conveying movement (halting of movement), at some parts it is play on the meaning of words by dissecting them. The structure was purposely made for that.
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Amazing π
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Thank you
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Haha. At some points it was supposed be jarring as a way of conveying movement, at some parts it is a play on the meaning of words by dissecting them.
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